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Well Pup Dog was at it again chasing Wakinda Dog so Nubby started telling them about the mysteries of life but then a tree grew in that time and Mrs. Post's parrot got stuck in the tree so Nubby tried to use a street light to save it since he didn't have any elbows but old Pup Dog was at it again chasing Nubby Stevens and Studz Lincoln had to finish the race but Nubby was covered in more coconut oil than one of Papa's coconut shakes and actually it's not very quiet around here at all.

True, Ben might be feeling a little small after all that. However, our intentions are good and we are only telling him this to help him improve his writing skills. If he takes it on board and makes the corrections I'm sure it was turn out to be a half decent story. It has mystery, which is always interesting. And if it makes Ben feel a little better, I have seen far worse.

If I remember correctly, putting a dino statue between two paint shops will turn it blue. Also, the events you all mentioned are actually triggered by the number of visitors an object gets (minifigs will randomly choose places to walk to). In addition to the volcano erupting and shuttle launching, other events include the water large fountain can turning gold, dinos turning their heads and looking at you, and stone pillars turning.

If the big red text in the images he posted didn't tip you off, it's not his model. I'm glad to see another person with an interest in 3D stuff, but frankly, there's nothing good I can really say here, as the model isn't yours, the textures are poorly set up (did you at least make those, or are they somebody else's work too?), the shading is flat (you could at least add in some specular highlights), some pieces are the wrong color entirely (the hips should be black on Axle, Docs' neckwear should be black, not that weird dark blue, and there's a weird line running down the center of his cap) and even the basic character names are wrong... And the fact that you said "This is Doc in full. I won't be improving him" when there's a lot of stuff that needs improving really sends up a red flag for me. Oh, and "Based off the minifigure..." and "Based the minifigure..."? Might want to double check your grammar next time, it should be "Based off of the..." and/or "Based on the...".

THIS POST IS PROOF THAT THE FOLLOWING VIDEO CAN LEAD TO MENTAL INSTABILITY [11:50:49 AM] Lair of Rockwhales: i think the cameraman is drunk? [11:51:16 AM] Lair of Rockwhales: is this a failed harlem shake video? 2:33 PM - PeabodySam: ... 2:33 PM - PeabodySam: Oh God... 2:33 PM - PeabodySam: Just that preview image alone... 2:34 PM - PeabodySam: Cragger, get your hand away from your crotch when you're in front of the ladies... 2:34 PM - PeabodySam: PLEASE 2:42 PM - PeabodySam: I am REALLY, REALLY, REALLY going to regret this... 2:42 PM - PeabodySam: How long is this intro? 2:42 PM - jamesster: about a minute 2:42 PM - PeabodySam: About a minute too long, I think... 2:42 PM - PeabodySam: ALRIGHT 2:42 PM - PeabodySam: I'LL DIE 2:42 PM - PeabodySam: JUST YOU WATCH ME DIE 2:43 PM - PeabodySam: I WILL DRINK YOUR CUP OF POISON 2:43 PM - PeabodySam: NAIL ME TO YOUR CROSS 2:43 PM - PeabodySam: AND BREAK ME 2:43 PM - PeabodySam: BLEED ME 2:43 PM - PeabodySam: BEAT ME 2:43 PM - PeabodySam: KILL ME 2:43 PM - PeabodySam: TAKE ME NOW 2:43 PM - PeabodySam: BEFORE I CHANGE MY MIND 2:43 PM - PeabodySam: Oh, this is really off to a good start. 2:44 PM - PeabodySam: CHIMA 2:44 PM - PeabodySam: With the drunk narrator. 2:44 PM - PeabodySam: Planet? 2:44 PM - PeabodySam: Okay, so we got confirmation that this takes place on a different planet. 2:44 PM - PeabodySam: WHAT 2:44 PM - PeabodySam: WHEN SUDDENLY DINOSAURS 2:44 PM - PeabodySam: OKAY 2:44 PM - PeabodySam: THAT'S IT 2:44 PM - PeabodySam: THAT'S THE INTO 2:44 PM - PeabodySam: AH GOD 2:45 PM - PeabodySam: THAT WAS SO BAD THAT IT'S MESSING WITH MY SPELLING AND STEALING MY R'S 2:45 PM - PeabodySam: And I would advise against reading "stealing my r's" out loud. 2:49 PM - PeabodySam: That preview image of Cragger's hand on his crotch sitting next to a bird-woman... 2:49 PM - PeabodySam: Yeah, I think Pterisa is in the other room looking for the brian bleach. 2:49 PM - PeabodySam: Brain bleach, too. 2:50 PM - PeabodySam: But we need the Brian bleach because there's too many Brians here. 2:50 PM - PeabodySam: I guess? 2:50 PM - PeabodySam: This video stole my r's and turned my brain into Brian. 2:51 PM - PeabodySam: And I only watched the first 59 seconds of it. 2:51 PM - PeabodySam: Which was nothing but a diorama, a drunk narrator, and a BIG LIPPED DINOSAUR MOMENT 2:51 PM - PeabodySam: Plus that disturbing preview image. 2:54 PM - PeabodySam: OH GOD THAT VIDEO IS SHOWING UP IN MY YOUTUBE WATCH HISTORY 2:54 PM - PeabodySam: GOTTA REMOVE IT 2:54 PM - jamesster: hehe 2:54 PM - PeabodySam: TOO LATE 2:54 PM - PeabodySam: THE SUGGESTED VIDEOS ARE COMING IN 2:55 PM - PeabodySam: AH CRAP 2:55 PM - PeabodySam: "Suggested Video: [insert furry porn here]" 2:55 PM - PeabodySam: HOLY CRAP 2:55 PM - PeabodySam: JAMESSTER 2:55 PM - PeabodySam: YOU 2:55 PM - PeabodySam: ARE 2:55 PM - PeabodySam: THE 2:55 PM - PeabodySam: WORST 2:55 PM - PeabodySam: ROOMMATE 2:55 PM - PeabodySam: ... 2:55 PM - jamesster: run 2:55 PM - jamesster: fast 2:55 PM - jamesster: wait what 2:55 PM - PeabodySam: Wait, you're not even my roommate. 2:56 PM - PeabodySam: PTERISA I NEED MORE BLEACH 2:56 PM - PeabodySam: QUICK I NEED SOMETHING LESS DISTURBING... 2:56 PM - PeabodySam: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=MXLAwfN1Z20 2:56 PM - PeabodySam: ... 2:56 PM - PeabodySam: Ah, Friends. 2:56 PM - PeabodySam: I've never been happier to see you. 2:57 PM - PeabodySam: My only Friends...

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[1:46:10 PM] jamesster: I find it ironic that I'm picking through your post to find typos [1:46:17 PM] jamesster: is that even irony? [1:46:17 PM | Edited 1:46:24 PM] Scorpius Maxima: Stop critiquing my critique! [1:46:22 PM] jamesster: oh blah I dunno [1:46:28 PM | Edited 1:46:28 PM] jamesster: it's amusing, regardless [1:46:29 PM] Alcom Isst: Is Jamesster meta-critiquing? [1:46:41 PM] jamesster: inb4inceptionjoke [1:46:43 PM] Scorpius Maxima: IT'S THE CRITIQUECEPTION [1:46:48 PM] jamesster: I BLOODY KNEW IT

Continued from above post NO. DON'T. NEVER AGAIN. EITHER IT IS A BIRD, IT IS NOT A BIRD, OR FRED HAS NO IDEA WHAT THE f**** HE IS LOOKING AT. NONE OF THIS, "or was it?" Bulls***. NO. >_< Nyrgh... "Thing" is a horribly useless word. Guess what? Thing can be anything. Context says he is looking at the may-or-may-not-be bird, but I don't know that. He could be looking at anything. Be more specific. What thing? THE THING THAT JUST FLEW OVER HIM? HM?Better yet, THE CREATURE? Please, for my sake, don't call anything a thing. Um... How the.. wha...That is one of the worst run-ons I've seen in quite a while... Not to mention that none of this made any sense. I don't even... I don't know, why don't you tell us?I have never ever heard someone describe a location as "in between his left and his right." Breaking new ground in needlessly convoluted prose? Between his right and his left would be RIGHT IN FRONT OF HIM. Call it that. How he didn't notice something right in front of him? It's possible, even likely considering all that's going on around him, but you can't just gloss over this fact. By "as"I think you mean "to be." "What seemed to him to be a fortress."Otherwise this line is fine. Do i need to break out the Fitzgerald again? Don't exclaim. The reader will decide for thonself whether it's worth shouting about.Which, BTW, it isn't. Another run-on sentence. Best way to address this one is to separate it into two. "His curiosity got the better of him. He ran..." Two sentences. Also "while wishing he had a camera" is not how I would say that. People don't do things while wishing, they wish while doing other things. "He wished he had brought a camera as he ran towards the fortress..." This is the one line in this chapter that is actually well-written. Kudos. Awkwardly stated, but not incorrect. It just doesn't flow. This came up earlier, but I glossed over it... "his left." Just "his left?" How about "to his left" or "on his left" or "to the left of him?" In this case, "the path to his left" would work best."and he would've been easily lost in it" would be better stated as "that he would be easily lost in." Like so: "The path to his left was blocked by a forest that he would be easily lost in." Better, right? Also it seems that both obstacles are "his left." Remove "then" and these lines should be fine. And is not a comma. "He jumped, caught the vine..." More detail here! Talk about him trying, falling, trying again. The story will be better off for it. You're allowed to use pronouns. After you say "the wall" once you don't need to keep saying "the wall.""He could just see over the wall and was about to climb over it when it broke down." I'm not one for onomatopoeia but it's not necessarily a problem. Just don't overuse it. Well I'm exhausted. I need to look at puppies now.

Their names are Axle and Docs

UPDATE: The final download pack can be found >here. Click on the image for a full 1080p version. Thanks to le717 for his technical support with both modding LDD and using POV-Ray, and credit for the decals goes to LuxorV from Eurobricks. I'd really like a suitable cave background to place behind this, something akin to the game's loading screen if possible, but definitely 1080p - can anyone suggest such an image?

The world must never know. (this reminded me of an old youtube poop idea I had involving Papa. Yes it's as weird as this picture might make you think it is)

no Red, you have to be at the tool store to upgrade you're not even a Rock Raider

What now? I don't get what's happening besi... oh, is it because the firetruck is on fire? (or in an explosion at least...)

let's install a loop they said it will be fun they said

Papa is kissing Gideon Worse. What.

I just noticed how lazy the sprites for the crowds are :|

He crashed his invisible car. Why does he have an invisible car? He was afraid if the colours clashed, the car would crash.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=V4HhP2gZYBQ

The Binary File Editor comes in handy. Make good use of if.

...which was based off of a book... .......which was called the book isn't even 50 years old

What do you mean 'original?' was there more than one reference? Anyway this would be a Charlie and the Chocolate Factory reference, yes? Technically, yes, this would be a Charlie and the Chocolate Factory reference, but it is not the original reference (someone will pounce on it now).

the longer I stare at this the better it gets

Cyrem mentioned the bird once, and understandably so, as you did say 'Fred dived towards the ground as the bird (or whatever it was) flew over him with a WHOOSH!!!'.

I don't work much with Blender, but I have exported plenty of models from LDraw-based programs before, and never run into problems like those. Regardless, it seems like something that could be fixed in whatever Blender has for a material editor. Ah, so they're the ones by LuxorV. Might want to give credit up front next time. Seems rather strange to me that Blender wouldn't be able to do that, but regardless, you should be able to get an exact match by opening LuxorV's textures in an image editor and grabbing the RGB values for the basic colors (yellow and dark gray and such), then using them for the rest of the minifigure. He is called "Docs" in absolutely every appearance except for one or two places where his name was misspelled as "Doc" (like in the book you mentioned). Uh, I didn't say shadows, I said shading, and I was recommending that you add specular highlights to make things pop out more. Again, I don't use Blender much so I can't help with the specifics, but try this:

Eh, yeah I may have gone overboard there, but I really felt it was the best way to do it. I feel that giving concrete examples of exactly what is wrong and how to fix it is better that just generally saying "I don't like this, fix it."'course, there's probably a happy medium between these two extremes, but I wouldn't know where to find it. Also I want to make it clear that I'm not trying to be mean, I'm merely being brutally honest. The story could be decent, if it is done well, but at the moment it is not. It should not be considered an insult to tell someone that they did something poorly if they had, in fact, done it poorly. Now if I had said something along the lines of, say, "your story is bad and you should feel bad! Go crawl in a hole and never show your face again!" Yeah, that's bad, that's insulting and completely unhelpful. But I did not say that, did I? Rather, I took the better route, rather than simply say it was bad, I took each bad line, told him exactly what is wrong with it, and how to fix it. Some of the things I said might have been a bit mean, but I had wrote a lot, I was tired, and everyone has their breaking point. I tried to be as objective and level-headed as I could but sometimes I run out of patience. And yes, like James said, it's better for the criticism to come now so that he doesn't get an even bigger letdown later in life.

I certainly hadn't expected that reference.

I find this much more aesthetically pleasing than the rather skeletal looking cargo carrier. Now this is something I'd actually feel like riding in.

I see it as a line-by-line analysis to learn from and an amusing image posted in an attempt to lighten the mood with humor. :|

So which would you rather have: You recieve no constructive criticism, and keep working on bigger and bigger projects that are all flawed in the same ways until finally somebody breaks it to you that your work has a lot of problems (or you figure it out on your own later), and by that time you've wasted a ton of time on effort on things that could have been far better (which can absolutely crush all your desire to keep moving forward in that area), or You receive constructive criticism early on, and perhaps it stings a bit at first, but then you use it to improve and create better things, making your time spent much more productive and eventually leading to you becoming far better at it than you initially were. I've had the first option happen to me multiple times before, and it set back my work in the project by several months to half a year each time. It sucks. Point taken, I too would go with the second option. I just felt that perhaps the line-by-line analysis of one member and the awkward gif are a little much.

Yup. I feel sorry for the poor guy. Not that I've had the chance to read the story yet. Why do you feel sorry for him?I didn't say anything that isn't true, and to be honest, I tried to be as nice as possible. But sometimes people produce things that are bad, and if they continue to think that they are good then they will never improve. We're only helping him.

Yup. I feel sorry for the poor guy. Not that I've had the chance to read the story yet. >Implying constructive criticism is a bad thing

First, everything that Cyrem said. Well I don't know what else to do other than pick through this, line for line. I've only read the first, er, "Chapter," but honestly I doubt I need read further. Ugh... here we go. Yes that was stupid. Never do it again. But at least you realize you did wrong. On to the story. NononononoThis is not how you tell a story. Out with the parentheses! NO MORE. If you want to describe this guy, then for the love of Pinga describe him! Even something as simple as "He has brown eyebrows" would be preferable, still stale but acceptable. This, just, no. Do not insert your own commentary. Also, don't ever refer to another work. Never say "the guy from ~~~~" because then you immediately alienate every single reader who does not know ~~~~. Also, the "there is a xxxx who is xxxx" construction you have going on there, also bad. Try, "A LEGO City Minifigure is using a jet pack to get across the galaxy, when he notices a planet..." much better. This line's fine. Moving on. NO! Nonononono.Out with the persona commentary. NO MORE. YOU DO NOT BEGIN SENTENCES WITH AND. I mean, you can in many cases... this is not one of them. You also referred to another work again! don't do that! No.You tell us his name, then you refer to him by name. His name is something that should have been brought up when you were describing him (which, now that I think on it, never happened.) Or you could say something like "Fred, as he is called..." BUT NOT THIS. Also, you switch tenses here. Up until this point you were using present tense, here it switches to past tense. Yeah, don't do that. Pick a tense and stick to it. I don't know if this is one or two sentences so I'll treat it as one.So, yet again, ixnay on the arenthesespay, 'kay? If Fred can't tell what it is, then that should be expressed through the prose. "Fred couldn't tell what had hit him, but he figured it must have been a missile of some sort?" Something like that. And on 'Technic 1x1 half tube' nonsense. You've crossed the threshold from no description to to much detail. Something like "only a little damage" would actually be fine in this case. If you start giving exact measurements, don't. Estimate. Fred's not carrying a yardstick (I hope) It's not like he could precisely asses he damage done to an object n his back. “Cut out all these exclamation points. An exclamation point is like laughing at your own joke.†― F. Scott Fitzgerald.This guy knows what he's talking about. You should listen to him. Not quiiite a run-on, but still to much information for one sentence. You need to work on your pacing. "take an exploration" is not, so far as I'm aware, a correct construction in any for of any language. Were to begin? How about "had landed" instead of "happened to have landed?" 'Pocked' should be 'poked.' A slab of rock is very unlike a zit. You have a run on sentence. 'particular' I think should be 'peculiar.' I need to take a nap. I UNDERSTAND NOTHING. This may for all I know be technically not entirely incorrect but DEAR LAWD OF THE SOUTH it's confusing. Consider using a comma every now and again. They are your friends. They will love you forever if you treat them well. Too many quotes, I must double-post now.

These look really nice, although on the Doc fig the decal colours don't quite match up to the body parts. You can see the difference between the face and the rest of the head, and the torso is a little off too. But the models themselves look really good, what did you use to make these?

Alright, I've only read through the first chapter and I have some constructive criticism for you to improve your story writing skills. Spell checking. There was a lot of misspelled words in this story. Make sure you run it through a spell checker before posting. You don't have to do it now though, I have already run it through MS Word and fixed many words for you. Grammar. Some sentences are constructed incorrectly or use the wrong words to describe things. You wrote this: "His left was blocked by a forest and he would've easily been lost in it, his left was a deep embankment which ended up in a deep moat." You don't need to say the 'left was blocked' as a forest is not a brick wall. By describing the general surroundings like you tried to do, you can assume the reader will understand Fred's circumstances and why he might walk in a particular direction. Writing it the way you did makes it sound like it's a command/response game. "ground like a zit sticking out the skin" I don't think using a 'zit' to describe a hill makes for good reading. Besides, zits vary in shapes and sizes. Visualize your story to avoid saying things that are obvious. "He looked to his left at which he say what looked like a battlefield. He couldn't tell who was winning or losing ... before he could properly see what the soldiers looked like" Is this battle happening before his eyes? If not, he obviously won't know who is winning/losing. If it is, why does Fred seem invisible to the soldiers so that they just ignore his existence(Yet a bird notices him)? No Commentary. Don't add commentary to your stories "(the text in the brackets)", it should explain itself. The first paragraph shouldn't be in the first chapter at all. It ruins the flow of the story. Chapter Transition. Each chapter should flow on to each other. Chapter 1 to 2 in your story reads like this: "He could just see over the wall and was about to climb over the wall when the wall broke down" to "The wall crumbled and Fred with it. He ripped through a tent-like roof and landed in a pool of water." Wasn't Fred climbing the vine to look over the wall? Was this vine growing out of the wall or from a tree? Somehow the wall broke down itself and Fred managed to teleport inside the fortress in order to fall on a roof. It would be good, if you get a chance, to re-write each chapter with these things in mind. The story sounds interesting, but these things make the story hard to understand. PS. Your post had some bad text formatting which I assume is from copying and pasting from LMB's. I fixed it for you. PPS. Give this story a title.

Wow those buildings are bland. The colour scheme is... simple. Maybe LEGO should look at having two Medieval themes, one for kids... one for adults. Kids can be all simple and for the adults, more detailed, far better colouring and perhaps the more Gothic style buildings like they should be. Are you referring a LEGO Flash game on their website? BTW: The King's Castle Siege link is broken.

"Yes doctor, this is Pepper, and he's-" "Dr. Pepper?" "No, just Pepper."

Watch out for the Brickster! He can trick you! He's tricked me before, and I am him!